Thesis: In order to make a successful transition from innocence to experience, one must have support from othe?

just need some quick help on my thesis to spice it up a bit and make it flow better?... I'm not looking for someone to tell me it's fine the way it is..... easy 10pts for who helps me the most :-)Thesis: In order to make a successful transition from innocence to experience, one must have support from others, be motivated to reach a goal, and dedicated to reaching that goal.